| = A great romp | James A Williams [22.Jan.12 16:55] |
| This is a great romp through impeccable locution. The great irony is that minutes ago I was revising the first draft of a text that I wrote early last year. I was using my thesaurus to help me rid it of unwanted adverbs. In other words, searching for stronger verbs. I did have a good laugh at that! The Spanish word for thesaurus is 'tesoro' which means treasure, which it is to me as the older I get the harder it becomes to find the right word. If I understand the rules properly you must have translated this Veronica, as you submitted it… though I may be wrong. Very well done I say. I have one lone comment. "Here father is next to sire and brother close to sibling…" There seems a natural pause after 'here', and I would insert a coma, though I do not believe it is wrong without it. Thanks, it was lovely, jaw | |
| = oops! | James A Williams [22.Jan.12 16:57] |
| Oops I see it was probably written in English. jaw | |